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Drinking by ~Misplaced-Karma:iconMisplaced-Karma:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Philosophical > Open


You know, I've written poems
about drinking women like tequila
drinking women like sunshine
and skyfire.

But let's both you and me
be honest for a moment--
I'm not gonna drink you at all.

Naw, girl. Your skin is porceline
and your eyes glass, inset
with precious stones and
flecked with gold leaf.

Your skirt is woven from
silken thread and if I poured
me a glass of you I think
I might be sucking down
gravedust.
©2007-2008 ~Misplaced-Karma
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I dunno. It's ok.

I'm just happy to be producing at all.

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~Treble-Spaz:iconTreble-Spaz: Dec 20, 2007, 8:11:29 AM
interesting imagery
=levdir:iconlevdir: Dec 20, 2007, 10:39:28 AM
I could see Tom Waits growling this out over a piano as an interlude between "Misery's The River Of The World" and "Singapore", but I know what you look like and what you sound like, and it would seem strange coming from you. It's pretty alright though.

--
Unless the sun inside you is burning your gut, don't do it.
~Bestial-Shenanigans:iconBestial-Shenanigans: Dec 20, 2007, 10:31:21 PM
Actually a bit frightening. Hints of demons. Imagery of "evil" in the everyday.

Essences of rare botanicals.
~LipWriting:iconLipWriting: Dec 21, 2007, 12:09:02 PM
Oh wow. This is pretty awesome.

Very new for you.
I like this shorter style. You're getting things across without over wording it.
<3

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"If you can't laugh at yourself, life's gonna seem a whole lot longer than you like. " - Garden State
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roses are red
violets are blue
Some poems rhyme
this one doesn't?
~Misplaced-Karma:iconMisplaced-Karma: Dec 21, 2007, 1:28:45 PM
God you make me grin.

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Escape Cold Herons, Jak.
~Misplaced-Karma:iconMisplaced-Karma: Dec 21, 2007, 1:29:01 PM
Thank you babe!

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Escape Cold Herons, Jak.
~Misplaced-Karma:iconMisplaced-Karma: Dec 21, 2007, 1:29:12 PM
I am tom waits.

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Escape Cold Herons, Jak.
~Misplaced-Karma:iconMisplaced-Karma: Dec 21, 2007, 1:29:19 PM
thanks man.

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Escape Cold Herons, Jak.
=levdir:iconlevdir: Dec 22, 2007, 3:28:36 PM
You lie.

--
Unless the sun inside you is burning your gut, don't do it.
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